Draft talk:Nylon Pink

Is there a way someone who is familiar with the band and the English language can take a shot at this article? There are some pretty amazingly Engrish sentences in there. "and rhythm guitarist Genn became the rhythm guitarist""Then, the group became for the longest time a quintet," — Preceding unsigned comment added by 69.47.238.109 (talk) 07:00, 3 June 2014 (UTC)